Hearts–three senryu

angry words shouted
hammers the heart like a fist
nails in animus

thin, icy strands loop
around and around a heart
cold barbed wire cuts deep

starving, hollow heart
fed on by gluttonous man
lies mute at death’s door

©2022 July Day

senryu

(The last senryu was inspired by a line from the Karen Slaughter book Pretty Girls that I recently read, and I quote: “Marriage—that’s what he called it. Though men like Paul do not marry women, they own them, they control them, they are voracious gluttons who devour every part of a woman, then clean their teeth with the bones.”)

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5 thoughts on “Hearts–three senryu”

  1. Nice writing, July.

    I must say, I have never tried
    writing a senryu. It seems to have the same 5 7 5 syllables as a Haiku.
    What’s the difference?

    I’ve written lots of Haikus
    and Tanka’s.

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    1. From what I understand, a haiku deals with nature and the natural world, while a senryu is concerned with human nature. Until I took an online poetry course a while back, I had never heard of a senryu, nor a tanka, which (as you know) has 5 lines with a 5-7-5-7-7 syllable count, and can have any subject. And another note about a haiku, not long ago I read that now the majority of haiku are written in a 3-5-3 syllable format. I haven’t tried that yet. I enjoy the challenge of theses short poetic forms—every word has to count.
      Thank you for reading, Alan…always. 💕😊

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  2. Wow. All that from a quote.

    July, this poem is PERFECTLY written. Every word hurts. “Nails in animus.” Damn.

    PS Thanks to Allen’s question and your response, I’ve learned some more about poetry. I’ve never studied it. So thank you.

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